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In-between my toes

I have ten toes
Five on each foot
two are big
Two medium size
Two are in the middle
Then I've got the second smallest two
And finally the pinkies
That's what I call them

I wiggle them
And make funny shapes

Without shoes and socks
Baby brother comes to eat them
Do yours look like sausages too?

Toes are funny
My mummy plays
"This little piggy came to market"
On mine
Then she makes me giggle
all the way home

I asked mummy why do we have feet?

She replied
Your shoes wouldn't fit without them
Nor would you be able to balance

But I think we have them, for tickle time

And for collecting cruds
Mummy hates it
When I put them on my fingertip to show her

The end.

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Inspired by Mark and Alan. Poetry by children. Has anyone ever noticed how much babies love feet? Cruds?it's what we used to call the collection of dirt between our toes. I'm not sure if it is international or just British.
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what a delightfully simple poem this is! "Crud" is fine, but if you were to call that stuff between your toes "toe jam" someone might say, "ohyuckypooh-pooh!" Yes, baby feet are so cute--and you are cute, too for writing such a cute poem, lol. Jerry

Yuck! LOL. That does leave an impression. All in the name of childhood fun! So glad you liked this even if it is early morning and breakfast time!

Thank you...Teddy

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little conversation about toes. Seems to me, that children do indeed, love feet and toes. Maybe because it isn't something that is in direct sight? I mean, after all; your hands and the rest of you is something that one can readily see without much trying, but feet and toes require you to bend and actually make an effort. [Especially if you are of a little thickness around the middle].
I rather like the word "crud" than [toe jam]. Toe jam is not something I would particulary care to eat and crud doesn't seem to be anything suggestive to put in ones' mouth. Funny and cute. ~ Geez.
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I love your thoughts on this, seems that your right, I think it's all about curiosity and feet are much more covered. Glad you enjoyed this, I was wondering about the word hate? Do you think it works here?I really dislike the word "hate"but it is something a child would say because they always learn the more serious words? Just wondering, what you think

Thank you...Teddy

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that the word [hate] is about the best one that could be used. Children don't have subtlties in their speech, they don't learn that until adulthood. A child's world is much more clearly defined; if you don't love something, you hate it. ~ Geez.
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That's what I thought. Thanks so much my friend.

Thank you...Teddy

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to "toe jam" lol

I suppose so! LoL I never heard of toe jam until today, how wonderful. And how yucky all at the same time!
( Hugs)

Thank you...Teddy

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