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Beginnings...

One final satisfying push!
Labor, gratifyingly over...
"It's a beautiful boy"
Nurse says in a smiling voice.
(pain no longer matters)
Gently placing him into
hungry waiting arms.
Healthy!
He is pink and perfect
unconditional love,
both mutual and enduring.

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Simply stunning!
A winner entry even if it doesn't win

I love it beginning with the title till the last word.
Thank you for sharing dear.

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thank you for being so positive. but I know it won't win, as it isn't in the cards and someone upstairs has it in for me, lol.

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Hello, Cat,
What a tender, loving poem. Beautiful title!
L

thank you, dearest lavender!

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justifying the pain of childbirth, and the joy of motherhood! I've been in the delivery-room and watched. It was a life changing experience. The beginning...Nice stuff! ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

sorry i am so late!

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My lovely and kind wife is a super hero nurse in the local labor and delivery unit. I assure you she lives for these moments and they pay her for it. These moments are so spiritual and your poem speaks to the magic in that room when those tiny creatures come screaming (hopefully) into this world.

Beautiful job
Tim

that is so great! I bet she loves her job!

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Makes me think of each of my children's birth...all very different ways they entered the world but the end result was the same. So beautifully written.

~RoseBlack~

I'm so very glad that I could touch your heart. thank you!

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A very beautiful and thought provoking poem.

it is nice of you to say so!

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Ps
We have just had a great grand child, I know what you are feeling.

on the newest member of your family!!!

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Dear Cat! Well deserved indeed.

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thank you...it really surprised me!

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Well deserved. The contest had a lot of great entries this week.

Tim

yes...many great entries...I never imagined I would win :)

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Wonderful, tender poem!
L

I appreciate your words and wishes.

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A job well done!

~RoseBlack~

thank you I thought your poem was amazing!

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Easy to read Cat, and a happy ending, terrible shame all births could not end like that. Alex

it seems as if you have had an experience not so wonderful. if so, I am sorry.

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Yay Cat - congrats!!!

Best

Michael Anthony

thank you Michael!

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I'd say look at my poem too the

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Tick Tock Shick

I am never enough I write to fulfil the act.

Act 1 GTA IV

Act 2 GTA VI Self promotion

Act 3 In be cil-o

Drop

mic-scuk
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But I like yours more :)

thank you for sharing with me.

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Great poem, experienced similar situations.

that is wonderful news!

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Pink and perfect,,,, that's all we need ! ( other hues acceptable and welcome )

nice one cat.

Obi.

absolutely!!!

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