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From the beginning

Submitted by Seren on Fri, 2016-02-19 13:34

From birth
I gazed at a world
through your eyes,
colours more vibrant
flowers intensely fragrant
music encompassed
my soul with joy.

Teaching from birth
and being taught,
to be your mother
loving a quartet
like no other.

Forever's of infinity
can never erase,
the infinite bond
that binds

A thousand nights
can never darken,
the bliss of a breathe
I first felt inside

When I am no more
my love will remain free,
in the stars and moons
light's in my blood line

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I was blessed then
as I am now.

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alidzain

Fri, 2016-02-19 15:43

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This is beautiful, dear. Thanks for sharing.

Alid

Seren

Wed, 2016-03-02 05:16

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Thanks so much very happy you liked it !!

Hugs Jayne.

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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Rula

Sat, 2016-02-20 08:04

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Your words full with emotions reflect mother's love at its best
I especially liked the opening stanza.
Bless you dear.

❤❤❤❤❤❤

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Seren

Wed, 2016-03-02 05:17

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Thanks so much for the visit .. I am chuffed you liked it !!

Love Jayne xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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Geezer

Sun, 2016-02-21 09:58

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There is no greater blessing than mother-hood. You have raised your children and now they will carry your blood line on. After we are gone, there are only the children we have brought into the world and they will carry the memories of us to their children. That way we never really die.
Higgest bugs Sis, for this one! ~ Gee

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Seren

Wed, 2016-03-02 05:19

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What can I say we are all made up of matter matter never increases or so ive read probably wrong nowdays, but I like to think that we go back and become a part of the cosmos not so much alive as in being

Thanks for the visit .. I am always happy when you like them

Love and higgliest bugs Sis xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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lovedly

Wed, 2016-02-24 15:14

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how u leave
us in vain

Seren

Wed, 2016-03-02 05:21

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Never leave in vain .. disappearing with what's left of life ;)

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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raj

Sat, 2016-02-27 13:07

Pure and sacred motherly love pulsates & emotes in every verse of your poem..

Much love and warm tight hugs...

raj (sublime_ocean)

Seren

Wed, 2016-03-02 05:23

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Thats a beautiful comment and its ones like yours that make me keep on keeping on

I appreciate it very much

Love and biggest hugs Jayne xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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