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Because There Is No Laughter

Because there is no laughter
in the morning,
the flowers wake up late
or not at all,
my milk is sour
and all the bread is stale.

My smiles are only memories,
I wear a rainy day,
my crown's a thick gray cloud
and my spirit is the cold.

My pain is like the evening light,
beautiful, tragic
and crimson everywhere,
another still-born poem.

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thanks for the lovely imagery poem. Nicely done..

Alid

You're welcome :)

No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job. - TS Eliot

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Liked to read the similes used by you to relate various moods. A nice crisp poem, a pleasure to read it as almost always is the experience while reading your posts...

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

Thanks Raj

No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job. - TS Eliot

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William I felt like a cloak of sorrow was being draped around me as I read your poem,

This is a cracking good poem, I don't have anything to suggest

I will say, Bravo :)

love JC xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

Thanks for liking this. It was sadness that I had been reflecting on.

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No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job. - TS Eliot

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