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Battle

Battles are not necessarily ages old
Neither are they fought with strychnine incense
Invisible wealth are samurai cobras in a mold
Young sweet dripping apples and cherries (intense)

The battle may only last the chocolate moon phased
And so the weary retreat within vanilla perspiration.
There are no loud wounds on the battle wearied tased
Only the sad thoughts of sundown esteem and inspiration

New age universes bring us the war to harness
Die hard after die hard living to the very toe-line
They go the distance for gold sifting through sadness
Eyes sharp burst in the deep of night but it’s just fine

Round robin massacres, howls screaming, “Forward!”
All the castles arrive; a bee hive of tribes
Only one dominates, there can only be one afterward
To be spoiled receiving all the gifts (bribes)

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a battle [that is].
Was tired and tried of how to begin
Had know idea of the line; where it went?
Nothing prepared, it was a sin
Figured a message, like; go get bent.
~ Geez.
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That was as messed up as the attempt at a poem but I got the abababab etc....
Only you could get something out of that ...Ha!

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Originally it was a surreal but then I made the rhyme pattern ababababab and so on. That rhyme pattern was cause for certain changes and the message became a bit vague.
Later,,

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Speaks to me... like the imagry.

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