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A Ballad of the Wild Huntsman

Beware of forests, gloomy-dark
at night around the witching hour;
beware of Halloween, the time
when evil gains its greatest power.

The Huntsman rides through clouds above
in lead of his wild entourage;
with hey-o! and huzzah! huzzah!
he brings to naught stout men’s courage.

A wide-brimmed hat conceals the eye
that casts a light of evil rage;
he had been god to mankind once,
till Christian gods usurped the stage.

Cruel dogs rush far ahead and help
in search for all who fear his sight.
His whip cracks like loud rifle shots--
they resound through this ghostly night.

This mortal cowers at his sight,
conceals himself among thick brush,
alas, the Huntsman has espied
the wretch in futile frenzied rush.

Above tree crowns he cracks his whip
again--again, and at each crack
the innards of dead animals
settle ‘round the man’s front and back.

A cyclone lifts him to great heights,
then drops him downward like a stone;
the hunter laughs a thunderous laugh
and feeds each dog a broken bone.

Beware, if you walk through dark woods
at night--at evil Halloween--
when ancient gods the forests roam,
to show man what they once had been.

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So i swear I'm going mad, I wrote you a review for sonnet 44 and now it's gone,
Please put my madness to rest by saying you swapped poems, dear Man I don't want to think I've completely gone bonkers

Now to this one

Brilliant and very haunting, love it!
You make me scared to walk home at night "giggle" I shall take some pepper spray. The peppers in the south are very strong. Xo

Thank you...Teddy

yes, dear--I swapped poems. After I saw Shakespeare's Star Sonnet I felt humbled and decided no longer to compete with that man. As a matter of fact, I may just discard my goose's quill in favor of my long-neglected violin and cello. I'm sorry I didn't get to see you review of sonnetn 44, dear lady, but such are life's diapointments and one must bear them as best as one can. I shall, however, always allow my eyes to feast on your own charming verses. But, I must thank you for the critique of my ballad. Pepper spray? It's worth a try. Be well, dear signora. Very much yours,
Jerry

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I am reminded of some of the old Norse legends, those of which Ragnar would have been telling. Really well done!

this story I picked up in Northern Germany while working at the American Consulate. There, in the plains, in fall or spring, one can asily perceive the wild hunt led by Wotan (Odin) in the clouds. Spooky, lol. People used to believe that stuff, and none is better for this Halloween season. Thank you for reading, kind sir.
Jerry

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this tale immensely, but felt that you mixed your tenses a little and that was the only distraction. ~ Geez.
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Not that I see the problem. It's all written in the present tense, except for a minor flashback, but I'll give it all another read. Appreciated,
Jerry

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that the Huntsman should: [has] espied instead of [had] espied. All's good. ~ Geez.
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consider it changed to "has."
Thanks, good friend. Jerry

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