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The Balarina: my favorite Childhood toy

When I was a little child,
I had my toys, stacked and piled.

Lego blocks, and flying kites,
model princesses and those of knights.

Miniature cars of every size,
dolls and bears with big, wide eyes.

Sand-buckets and toy-aeroplanes,
colored balloons and grand toy-trains.

Then I got a special gift,
that no one child would e'er resist;

a music box, made my day;
a balarina popped up to play.

It filled my heart with real joy,
though one might think it wasn't a toy.

That wasn't all, however as yet;
she wore the dress I dreamt to get.

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The poem "The Balarina: my favorite Childhood toy" effectively utilizes a simple rhyme scheme to convey a sense of nostalgia and childhood joy. The first two stanzas effectively set the scene and introduce the child's collection of toys. However, the third stanza's abrupt transition from a list of toys to the child's dislike for them may be confusing for the reader. It might be beneficial to provide some context or explanation for this shift in sentiment.

The introduction of the 'balarina' in the fourth stanza is a clear turning point in the poem, but the term 'balarina' may be a typographical error. If it is intentional, providing an explanation or context for this unique term could enhance the reader's understanding.

The final two stanzas effectively convey the child's affection for the balarina and the joy it brings. However, the final line about the dress the child dreamt to get feels somewhat disconnected from the rest of the poem. Expanding on this idea or tying it more closely to the theme of the balarina could create a more cohesive conclusion.

The poem could also benefit from the use of more vivid and sensory language to create a more immersive experience for the reader. For instance, describing the colors, sounds, and textures of the toys could help to bring the poem to life.

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Very nice childhood toy imagery throughout your poem however…very respectfully, the tempo and meter count in many of your lines were uneven and did not flow smoothly. Also you mixed up the past and present tense in some of the lines. These little things made it rather distracting to read your poem. Besides this, I did enjoy the last two lines of your poem very much as it was a clever way to bring the reader back with a final note to your childlike fantasy and desire to dress as a ballerina just like the ballerina in your music box.

Thank you a lot for your comment and the honest critique.
I had some edits done. Hope it reads smoother now.
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P.S. I visited your profile and wow you really got a huge experience in writing poetry.


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Hello, Rula!
An endearing poem. I loved the Balarina music boxes, too! And of course, the dresses they wore were so charming. I'm wondering if the possessive punctuation is necessary in a couple places. I believe I understand the meaning, but it seems a bit uncomfortable to read correctly.
Maybe state:
"models of princesses and those of knights"
"miniature cars of every size" Just a suggestion...
I agree with the thought that balarina music boxes were more than toys - they sent us to a world of dreams and magic.
Thank you!
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I'm happy to see you around again.
Hope you get quick recovery sooner.
Thank you for sharing your thoughts and the suggestions.
Always appreciate it.


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Very wonderful poem! One of my favorites so far, if not the only one. Lol. I like how the rhyming scheme is so simple and endearing. Makes it easy to fall in love and read the poem with enjoyment. This is a killer! ❤️

I must admit to a tinge of jealousy. I always wanted a music box with a dancer in it, but never had one. Your description of a childhood world is delightful. I'm glad one of us got a ballerina!

Thank you,
Mary Beth

Because your words have touched my heart,
I stopped to share a little part.
Be nice, supportive, kind to all
As we walk through this Poetry Hall.

Sorry, I'm not sure how I missed your comment.
I'm sure you still have the desire to have one, so go and have it no matter what. It's never late I believe dear :)
Thank you for your kind visit and the comment.


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