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Bait Thoughts
bon vivants annoy me
early teen girls are scary
smart people tend to think
they have no character flaws worth mentioning
credit where credit is due; lazy people ARE aficionados of "chillin"
stupidity doesn't mean one is bad, but it is definitly dangerous
pretty women live in an altered state
stop knocking bass players, they can't help it
skinny chefs insinuate dubious skill
prancing musicians - STOP IT
losers and fishermen are prolific inventors of excuses
who wouldn't want a trophy wife (as long as the pre-nup is solid)
politicos, preachers, and pundits are mankind's favorites (NOT)
...lastly, and most importantly;
never let a debonair dude near your woman
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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gregwa8
Mon, 2018-06-11 03:53
ha! that was a fun romp.
ha! that was a fun romp.
brittle light
Tue, 2018-06-12 02:24
...that's all I hoped for.
...that's all I hoped for.
thanks
Al
author commentthemoonman
Mon, 2018-06-11 08:06
Ha Ha
Never, she'll be smitten and gone
enjoyed your thoughts
brittle light
Tue, 2018-06-12 02:26
thanks for understanding....
thanks for understanding....
glad you enjoyed
Al
author commentbrittle light
Tue, 2018-06-12 02:31
I like the "clowning with
I like the "clowning with characters" description
you Got It
thanks
Al
author commentgregwa8
Tue, 2018-06-12 02:51
"prancing musicians -- STOP
"prancing musicians -- STOP IT" hahahaha! :)
IRiz
Mon, 2018-06-18 22:19
I wonder what is behind the
I wonder what is behind the joke?
I enjoyed the read, yes, like everything i find on your page, it is a treat and a puzzle.
Is there a fear of finding yourself not to belong to any of the old convenient labels?
or a fear being rejected, to hear scary loud bright multi-head NO?
or is it a disappointment of finding how shallow the mysterious creatures could be?
I think the last one is the most probable, and I think that is what feeds your muse perhaps more often than you would want it. But hey, the result is great.
So if you need a new disappointment, I can help. ( In US people usually add that they have been joking. I do not favor this tradition. )
IRiz
brittle light
Tue, 2018-06-19 00:46
I ain't a'scared a nothin'
I ain't a'scared a nothin'
bait fish are used to catch bigger fish
bait thoughts are used to provoke big responses
and only incidentally, to make fun of people who fit a stereotype to the max
you are a mysterious creature, for sure,
but as far as you're concerned, this time it will be me who disappoints (no joke)
I believe you are gifted, I am just a smart ass
Al
author commentIRiz
Tue, 2018-06-19 09:29
First, I apologise for my
First, I apologise for my comment, it is personal instead of to be about a poem. But I have an excuse, my sincere interest in your poetry. There is a borderline that is too thin not to cross sometimes.
If you are not afraid to dissapoint, I welcome you to the club of lost cases where I am a chairman. Hahaha.
If you are what you call Smart Ass, I hope one day I will graduate to the title.
IRiz
brittle light
Tue, 2018-06-19 15:39
as Groucho Marx once quipped,
as Groucho Marx once quipped, "I wouldn't want to be in any club that would have me as a member"
even one as appropriate as 'The club of of Lost (Causes)
no apology ,please. I don't think there are any set rules of etiquette about how personally
two people are allowed to relate on the www.com or Neopoet specifically .
sometimes , after an extended amount of time, we want to drop the formality and stuffiness, and get real. Why not? How can that hurt the poetry?
your interest in my work is flattering to say the least
Al
author commentIRiz
Tue, 2018-06-19 16:44
Lol, what a clever citate.
Lol, what a clever citate.
Thank you for posting your poems here.
It is a real treat for me. I take my time and plan to read one of your poems a day.
IRiz