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Awakening

Submitted by lovedly on Thu, 2019-01-24 00:47

I never realized he was
till he was
but only when he wasn't

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Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Taste my new concept of briefery words like haiku 5 3 5
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Geezer

Thu, 2019-01-24 10:03

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Still trying to digest this one. ~ Geezer.
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lovedly

Thu, 2019-01-24 10:42

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sum total

''one realises the value of some one
once that ''some one'' is absent
or no more
my newer briefer version
of conveyance
in fewer words

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lovedly

Sat, 2019-02-02 09:44

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This is abs IMAGERY
Do try and read my poem on a girls passing by
she said meet you on the other side

''NO OTHER SIDE''

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