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Ave Maria

I will sing an Ave Maria,
if it ever comes again.

These shackles are jewel speckled,
donned from generation to the next.

We passed them on,
though they were painful,
under the eye of an aging world,
we guarded them with our lives
and what was left of our sanity.

Like sheep we are led to the slaughter
of reason,
and the judges;
book cases from Plato to Kant,
look down on us;

yet still we proudly walk on,
proud of our parent's yoke:

For from this burden was borne their love,
and it lives unsullied,
while all the world crumbles
at the feet of the wise.

And it is for that love,
that we carry this yoke also,
though it crushes our will and shoulders:

Remember, the rose will not desert the thorn.

So I will sing an Ave Maria,
even when the veil is torn
and the virgin is no more.

I will aspire to that purity,
should all Heaven frown,
and Hell lust with greed.

I will sing till the rising sun
and livid moon are no more,
till all the world now rests in a twilight,
under the watchful eye of the Gazer,

And when that last lingering hope is lost
to the symmetrical shades of new thought,

I will sing
of that rose which will not desert its thorn,
and in my song, new hope may yet be born.

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Thank you, Lonnie.

:)

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(Like sheep we are led to the slaughter
of reason,
and the judges;
book cases from Plato to Kant,
look down on us;

yet still we proudly walk on,
proud of our parent's yoke:) etc. etc....

I get a sense that this is the passing down of customs/religion/beliefs even though faced with persecution. Am I that far off?
Don't know why I got a depressed, sinking feeling with this write, but there you go.

But I really have to start extra hard at making my poems less depressing. I thought the last line had enough hope in it. I tempered the original a bit to make it less grave.

Thanks for passing by, Cent :)

No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job. - TS Eliot

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but like Jesse I got a sinking feeling, not one of personal despair, but of unreasoning surrender.

To be honest I am not sure of your intent, which is ok, your reader is your master, but if the intent is "it is better to submit to the grinding world through faith rather than be enlightened by reason" then I spit on it.

I have been really off in a lot of my readings lately so tell me how wrong I am.

As verse it is excellent.

cheers,
Jess
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In many ways yes, that was the intent, and you were right. But to put it in less harsh terms, the poem is about sacrificing some amount of reason (however small, however large) as a sign of love and respect for the beliefs of the previous generations, something I sometimes find myself doing.

I'm glad you thought the poetry was beautiful, and for that sinking feeling: well, I'll do better to make my poems less depressing.

No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job. - TS Eliot

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