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AS AUTUMN FADES (splash pool workshop)

It won't be long now I see
'fore the calendar catches up with me
and we will both be in late fall
close to hearing winter's call
and reaching final destiny

When the autumn's come and gone
and I see winter's first chill dawn
shall I face the last season with fear
knowing the final cold is near?
I guess that I'll just carry on

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Structured: Western
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Too often my secondary meanings are too understated. Glad you got a hint of this one. I'll read this aloud tomorrow with fresh ears and see if your suggestion works. Thanks for the visit..........stan

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