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August Pandemic Contest edited

assasin

single minded destroyer
set on one goal.
odious lurker
going out of control.
fiendish flayer
who cares not the price
as the ignorant take chances
with each roll of the dice.
self-important fools
taking their pleasure
at great cost to others
they have taken the measure.
flaunting their arrogance
so many will perish,
the ones who came before
they who should be cherished.
let this be a warning
in public, wear your mask
or let your conscience
take you to task.

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Structured: Western
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*see #3 flay flay [flay] (past flayed, past participle flayed, present participle flay·ing, 3rd person present singular flays) transitive verb 1. lash or flog: to whip or beat a person or animal severely 2. strip skin off: to remove the skin or outer covering from somebody or something 3. criticize harshly: to criticize somebody or something harshly and severely, and sometimes unfairly 4. strip of belongings: to take all the money or valuables from somebody, especially by the use of deceit, intimidation, or similar Encarta® World English Dictionary © & (P) 1999,2000 Microsoft Corporation. All rights reserved. Developed for Microsoft by Bloomsbury Publishing Plc.
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reminded me of the voice of a young woman who said i lost my dad who was 65 but healthy...his only preexisting condition was believing in Trump....when I vote by Biden i shall be voting for him...

raj (sublime_ocean)

you are a very wise person, indeed!

*hugs, Cat
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When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

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Well said my dear friend.

It's awful to be wearing a mask when it's in the high temperatures so if I can do it, so can everyone. You have hit on a good view point of people being selfish. Here we were the first to wear them it's been pandamonium for sure. Stop being selfish people put your mask and shut up! Wonderful entry for the covid competition. Have a great day

Thank you...Teddy

it is a terrible shame. we all live on this planet and should be considerate of others. thanks, Teddy! you've a good heart and mind.

*hugs, Cat
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When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

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Hi Cat, well said. Mostly it's younger people who flaunt the protocols. The average age of contagion is now around 36, though the deaths are of older people, the disabled or children. It's easy to wear a mask where I live, the weather is cold, so I use a thick scarf. We can walk outside in our small neighbourhood.
Well said, perfect poem for the pandemic contest.
Take care! Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

thank you so much for reading and commenting. where I live, in Wisconsin, it has gotten to the point that they won't let them without masks into the stores...which in my opinion is a blessing. you take good care of yourself, okay?

*hugs, Cat
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When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

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It's me again,
I think this is a subject that's been missing so well done.

It's simple that if we have covid and we wear a mask we cannot give it a lot of people are unaware they even have it. It's also a law that should be given by each government in my opinion because who would want to wear a mask? They are horrible and uncomfortable but that's a small price to kill this horrible epidemic. We all need guidance from scientists and lawmakers because otherwise people do as they please unfortunately. I go on the tram via in Florence town centre five days a week and I can honestly tell you not everyone wears them so what's the point? Sorry to go on. But even each economy would have been safer for these simple masks. In an epidemic we need to come together and respect eachother, I'll have an Irish coffee now!

Thank you...Teddy

enjoy your coffee ;

*warmest hugs, Cat
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When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

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line 8 what do you think about this line instead
with each roll of the dice

nice work here good luck

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thanks much, C!

*hugs, Cat
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When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

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Please allow me to look at the virus from a more cheerful perspective. You know Christmas is near and I plan on sending all my friends here on this site, jewelry in the shape of that lovely Corvid-19. Also, I have designed baubles, bangles and beads with inlays of rubies to simulate the appearance of the classic virus. All can be worn without a face mask; however, the use of a face mask would greatly enhance the wearer's appearance.
Sorry to make light of a serious matter, but I want to close my mind to this daily assault on my tranquility. Let's keep our social distance and wear our masks. To hell with those who refuse to comply.

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>Please visit my website: www.jerrykspoetry.com

thanks for that...it was the chuckle I needed for today ;)

*hugs, Cat
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When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

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Hard hitting, does well all thru IMHO. I like it!

it was very nice of you to tell me so! I appreciate it :)

*hugs, Cat
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When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

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just wondering...

thanks for asking :)

*hugs, Cat
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When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

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