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An Audience of Cows...

An Audience of Cows...

I saw some cows leaning on the back fence
Just mooing and chewing their cud
I looked askance at them big brown eyes
And knew they were slinging some mud

I could tell by the way that they stared
I was the subject they mentioned
My appetite for their gossip
Made me the bone of contention

So I danced a little as I passed them
I spoke to them all by name
They rolled their eyes and let their tongues hang out
And went back to the mud-slinging game

"So, sister of mine, of the barn
How did he do last night?
He was very attentive, my dear
I was satisfied, quite"

"Well, I've heard that he lasts a while
I was wondering how did he do?"
I shook my hands that were swinging
Made a finger that pointed at you

As I sasshayed down the road
They said; "Hey, his fingers are wriggling!"
I showed them my hands, fingers all tight
And I heard the moos turn to giggling

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If I fail to read anything else before the new year, this will suffice.

Thought it great!,,,,, love Cows.

I like cows;
cows seem to like Me,
maybe we ought to get together sometime;
chew the cud,
talk udders--
YEAH,
that'd be good,

we could crap on daisies
in the meadow-
watch them grow-
piss in streams
add a liddle-- YELLLOOOWWW,
eat only the greenest grass
yeah,
that'd be good,

I just need to learn to mooo.
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a scene that I saw in a commercial on T.V. The cows were all standing leaning against a wood rail fence, switching their tails and looking very contented. They were watching the cars go by and I think that the commercial had something to do with California cheese. Contented cows? Anyway, a friend of mine had said something recently, about a group of girls that he knows and they are big gossips. He knows that they have talked about him because of one the group has a crush on him and his sister knows them. He called them cows and professes not to like them, although he has dated the one who has the crush. I thought that I would have a little fun with the notion. Glad you enjoyed. ~ Geezer.
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The back story is almost as enthralling as the poem.

Obi.

My aim was to entertain

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cows were meant
girls to be
Merry Xmas did you not yet read
TODAY IS 25TH

and there was also the intimation that the man is a farmhand that sometimes milks the cows by hand. Sometimes the cow's udders get sore from the machines and they have to be milked by hand.
~ Gee.
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are cows then there are cows lol

there are! ~ Gee.
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I could not tell at the end, seemed to me you were giving the international sign language to the cows to "go jerk-off". I was a bit confused at the end, it seems you gave them "the finger" ,or what were you
jiggling?
This is a clever poem, with very specific with details throughout. i would include the same in the finale... and by all means don't tell me in the comments...tell me in the poem!

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

to make it a bit clearer. I pointed the finger at the cow like you would if you wanted someone to know that it was YOU, I was thinking of. Like "Hey baby". Get it now?
~ Geezer.
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I thought that it was a tail worth telling, [I mean tale]. LoL

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