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Atomic Talking...

Atomic Speech

The beginning of what you call
the universe am I,
Hidden from none because none
could see me. I had the first thought
in this universe, to eat with my hands.
I created thousands, millions,
no billions of miles that you now
call space.
And yes I can see the question
forming in your head, we do
have hands. Did you assume, or
are you so thought lazy that it’s
easier to believe what the, ahem!
Scholars told you.

Those bumbling fools have caused
nothing but trouble in my, our space,
everything’s space.
Nuclear explosions, burning, so much
energy, and not just to stay alive, but
for that other abomination you
humans created, wealth.
You just haven’t got a handle on
this yet, this space thing belongs to
everything every animal and every
insect.

The air you breath I created
for all, why did I choose you idiots
to be the dominant species? I thought
there would be mistakes but I truly
believed you’d have ironed them
out by now. Just as well I put that
safety device in place, a that got your
attention.

What did I mean by safety
device I hear you ask, what could be
devised that would change anything
or save anything. Simple answer greed,
yes greed, I set up an inbuilt process in
everything that lives. And that process,
simplest way to explain it is that if one
species of anything becomes to greedy.
They simply devour themselves.

And you my friends of the past are well on
your way, the machines you have built for
destruction are ready. All you need now is
the human idiot to kick it off, and low and
behold we’ve found one.
Yes it will mean a few years with the earth
overheating, but I have that factored in so
not to worry. No I didn’t mean you should
not worry, but that I should not worry about
the rest of the creatures on this planet.
You I’m afraid had your chance but as
creatures go, you’re despicable. A cancer
on this beautiful blue and green planet,
pity really you have some wonderful
individuals. But so many greedy rotten
apples it’s rather sad. Sad that you’ll find
the cure for what I just called you but,
you will start killing each other before it
takes affect.

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its the poets job to speak out and you have certainly done that with this piece

Bravo

love JC x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

Thank you Jane for your time and comments. Love Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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The writing is very clever, seeming at first to be prose, but on reading unmistakeably powerful verse. Effective use of enjambment, almost acting as a rhythmic device.

The anthropomorphic principle bothers me a little. Hands? I don't quite get what the viewpoint is. The subject matter, though, is very clear. Brutally true.

but
for that other abomination you
humans created wealth. [badly needs a comma or hyphen after created]

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet Directors

Thank you Jess for your kind words, I will put a comma in place as you suggested. Regards Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

author comment

Sorry i didn't have time to answer the part about hands and eating, basically what i'm trying to impress here is. Though we eat with our hands we are not alone in this respect, and we don't have to gobble up everything at once. I believe humans use and abuse to much of everything especially with there hands, which we use to murder then we call it war. Other creatures use just enough energy to survive, and defend themselves when they need to. We are not an elite just more intelligent, an intelligence that we should use with more care. Regards Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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How the hell can we change how those that run the show, into a caring group that look out for the planet.
A place so unusually beautiful in that it holds us in its arms, then we cut them of bit by little bit, I know that we are here to learn of physical things, but there is no reason to learn of hate, greed and all those terrible things when the way we strive for is unconditional love, even the dogs in the street fare better than we do with how they treat each other.
I stupidly wrote to the UN ambassador from the USA once, when the USA was going to hand over their air force base Howard in Panama.
I said it should be converted to a UN base and center for learning as a test piece for all the countries of the world, where each country could have a port or Airfield with training facilities where each country could train its people for that region run by the UN. A place of excellence.
NO REPLY too many wars to attend to, instead of starting something new that would benefit the whole world.
Since then Iraq, and many other perpetual conflict areas where that greed is foremost, now Korea that could launch the world into a cinder heap, have we forgotten those men and women that gave their lives, in the wars to end wars.. I think so this world is run by political mobsters, at least people like the Kray's here in this country and Old Scar face in the states stayed true to his kind. They say being Nuked is fast and the transition to the after life painless,
Great write there young Man, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Thank you Ian for your comments, but i am a little worried about what you said about being nuked, or rather who it was that told you about it. LOL. Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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The ground Zero is the best place to be, the transition from humon to Spirit is very fast, ask the survivors of any nuclear catastrophe.
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

If you believe in spirits ( which i don't ) then i'm sure it's some comfort. Or maybe i just miss the point, maybe there is a god and he gives us the ability for mass destruction so he can have a fresh supply of angels. Sorry Ian i should not joke about feeling and believes. But i ask why do we do it, and i don't take the story that god gave us the power of self determination. Animals die in any nuclear explosion also, what part do they play in our self determination. Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

author comment

I have over the past few years had many an hours talk with what I call my friends, all these talks are on audio tape, who I talk to, or where they are, is for the individual to decide.
As I always say if there is No after life I will not be disappointed.
You are in complete control of what you are and do, if you choose to be bad so be it, if you live a life of a saint, then either of the two are your choice.
The children I talk to and sometimes the elders (Teachers) all say that their world is run on unconditional love and is of pure energy, so to me it is the pattern within that energy that we make is our own individuality, and unique to us.
We (My wife and I) have carried out a few very small tests to see the scope of the world we talk to (Spirit world) and it is comforting that we could independent of each other send presents to the children there.
It is a lot to explain, but it is not our place to try to convince others though I have been told that in my writing, I can help that understanding or just give out a quiet peace to some that need.
There are many aspects that are part of this other place as I shall call it but it is a vast universe and there are many differing ways of perceiving it.
There is no need for Sorry in anything you say, it is better that you say than just think, think cannot be changed but what you say can,
Yours as always, Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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