I am in agreement! And your poem evokes sympathy - The earth is being ruined by humankind, especially the western world. ( big business, corrupt goverments, corrupt religiion - all hand in hand )

"Man dominates man to his own injury" - those words were written hundreds of years ago, things haven't changed much since then, Perhaps I'm being pessimistic! but I just wonder if humankind, as a whole, have the capability to change - given the historical record.

Still as individuals we can try ( in our limited way ) to make life better for those around us, the more of us that do that the better.

A well written thought provoking poem - straight from the heart.

I loved reading it. Love Mand xxxxxxxxx

A powerful write. If we all do small things to lesson our impact on mother earth. Maybe we won't tip the scale to a point of no return. We have been so wasteful for so long. There are hundreds of ways reduce your carbon footprint. Many of them won't cost you a penny.
(in the end the rate can not be paid) if we don't start making payments now. Take Care. huey

Eddie,

I really liked this piece and the depression it gave off...I would have dropped the 'positive' verses for effect rather than to balance it...but then I prefer the darker more negative aspect of poetry.

Great imagery and the 'When in fact they are insects' really showed how small we are in the grand scheme of things.

My favourite and most powerful line to me was:

"The land covered in the dry death of the season"

that line was just sublime (no rhyme intended)

Great piece my friend.

regards,

HS

Eddie,

I was familiar with all your work from before the crash. There are many writers who say their work is dark, but when I read them, they often felt forced and not naturally dark. Yours never felt forced and I would love you to re-post old 'darker' writes and hopefully some new ones.

The harsh reality in your write was perfectly frightening...I'd discreetly drop all hope from the piece...we won't tell anyone, just our little secret!!

The 'sublime rhyme' is all yours my friend, as an early Xmas present!! Lol!

kind regards,

HS

Dear Mr. Cruz,
I love the poem. It really is packed with so much more than just mans meddling and dissection of science and ideology of what has happened, what is happening and what
will happen. Much of their..i.e. scientific brains, thought is egotistical and hypothetical.
I appreciate the hope you added. I also believe the Earth corrects itself when it gets out of balance and have not fully determined, in my own mind, if man really has that big of impact in the long run and enormity of it all, or if it is simply nature taking its course in evolving.
I feel your word choice is great and the poem really gives the reader something to think about. I was captivated and compelled to read, by your thoughts.
The only thing i saw I might change...
11th stanza, verse 3 : "But it took eons for us to realize what would be loss"... loss or lost?

Nicely done. I look forward to reading more of your work when things at home get a little less hectic. Thank you for sharing this deep thought...and i did not think it a rant at all.

Always,
Tonya

You said you weren't into poetry

you elevated me

beyond the heights of eternity

or should i say lenghts ,?

and now i see

you write such lengthy

gr88888 poetry
that i can hardly read

but will try tomorrow
as now i go to sleep