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Are We Crackers

Are We Crackers

Is our earth really in trouble or just
cracked up the middle, people starve
in Rome now without so much as a
squealing fiddle,
We invented money but can’t
spend what we got, had an honest
singer once but he went and got shot.

We never chase the rich for the
money that they owe, seems they
always have lawyers now, to look
after their dough.

We repeatedly stand at the cliffs edge,
never turning from our peril, the truth
seems to be hidden, or lost in a referral.
Like is Africa just a continent or a country
of living people, is the hope they need
sunk or buried under the needs of a church
steeple.
What to you is more important, the
repairs to a house of a never seen god.
Or hungry starving children, that I even
need to ask this, to me seems rather odd.

Money men follow markets that fly off
like startled birds, politicians give the
poor nothing but austerity and hollow
overused words. Have we really left the
caves our ancestors used to paint, is the
cave now our houses re-mortgaged to
look quaint.

I know this may seem funny
but I often cry when I write, angry at the
poor, wishing they’d stand up and
bloody fight. And all those men of god
who continue with the lie, the meek shall
inherit this earth but only when they die.

Do we have to follow the scriptures written
in that overstated bible. With so many
different interpretations leading to wars,
as the faithful turn out tribal. Don’t ask
me for the answer that I should later
then refute. But in the past we lived
in communes, before someone invented LOOT..

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you've almost said it all and pretty well indeed but I believe it reads most like prose unless this is intended.

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No it's not what i intended, i sometimes try to make the reader search for a rhythm. And perhaps this was my first intention, but i now realise my mistake as i believe the message to be the most important. I've edited it now and i hope it reads easier and a bit more poetic. Thank you for your comments and time, Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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I really liked the well-intentioned rant. I guess you said most of what I feel when I look around at the state of this benighted planet. Does anybody really give a damn?
Well written and well expressed.

Regards

Ian

TIME FLIES LIKE AN ARROW, BUT FRUIT FLIES LIKE A BANANA

Thank you Ian, It's good to see your still around. Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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The rhyme scheme is a hoot.
I agree with Rula that it skirted dangerously close to prose, but not so far that it troubled me or that the content was lost. It is a poem. I didn't read the first version, so...
It is an art in itself to be able to say ugly things in a somewhat humorous fashion.
I would clean up some of the line breaks, but that's all I can say to help.
wesley

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Thank you wesley, i will certainly have a go at tidying it up a little. Glad you enjoyed Regards Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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Your rousing poem almost makes me want to go out and shoot polititians! Very well stated views which I agree with.

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Please don't shoot any politicians, that lets them off to easily. And there's a distinct possablity you'd get life, yes a life time of pats on the back most likely. Just kidding, seriously i'm glad you felt moved by my poem. Love Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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As Rula said you have said it all, but as usual we as one or two voices cannot change those that rule.
They would starve us to death or pay some poor sod to kill us by telling better lies.
Thanks for pointing these things out.. I shall return to my Cave it is safe there from those creatures that seem to need money,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

How true Ian, they probably would find some way of discrediting everything and anyone who stands between them and their way of life, or should i say ways of greed. But i live in hope. Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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