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Apology to a Paperback

Submitted by purple-hobbit on Fri, 2019-03-15 19:31

Apologies to sharp edged pages I let blood to:
The permanently uneven dog eared creases,
And the salty stains of empathy.
Apologies for my name in pencil,
Saying you belong to me.

I apologise for the forgotten leaves pressed
that flutter out with the spine.
I guess I’m sorry that you won’t be read,
By others as you’re
Mine.

I will not share your story,
Although the words spread far.
Others will not see the tears,
the rips and binding scarred.

They will not share my three mint tea
I spilt up on your cover.
My memories inside this book
Cannot be read by others.

Each sellotaped binding,
And thoroughly folded spine,
Are things that make this very book
Undeniably
Mine.

I look at you with fondness
As you sit upon my chair
And remember all the memories
In each and every tear.

I cannot bare to part with you
As now you’re part of me,
You share my blood
So now you’re bound
And will forever belong to me.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Sparrow

Fri, 2019-03-15 20:41

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A lovely write that may need a tidy, where you wander a little.
The length of the lines could be evened out but love the story.
Could you please have a go at commenting on the odd poem in the un published part of Neopoet, xx
Yours as always Bampy, xxxx

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Eumolpus

Sat, 2019-03-16 00:44

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For those of us who still treasure such books (not kindle) they do become part of you, coffee stains and all.
I would shorten a bit, its a bit redundant and could be a touch tighter. But I really enjoyed the sentiment and the poem.

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

Cloudthings

Sat, 2019-03-16 05:36

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Would one call this an "Ode"? I loved the gentle refs to the tears & paper-cuts (that might be more?) & thus the powerful emotive ability of said book - fabulous start to draw us in, & you continued to lead well, as we explore with you the process of your attachment & nostalgia.

I only have a few books that beloved, but they are well worn & contain a plethora of deeply moving learnings for me alone (though in some cases I have bought 1/2 dozen copies to gift to dearest friends in the hope that they also get so much as I did.

You have honoured it far more simply & beautifully here though.

Cheers
Anni

My dear friend always told me "Water the seeds of joy first"

Geezer

Mon, 2019-03-18 12:05

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to keep all the books that I have read and none of them are dear enough to me, that I want to keep them forever. I like to keep my library-card in good shape, [pay my fines] and I keep my books there.
I do have favorites, but wait for a long time to get back to them; when they are not so fresh in my mind.
There are so many others just waiting to be read! I understand that there are many people that keep books that tell stories of their hearts and that is okay by me. One little crit. I would use [we're] instead of you're, in the line that says: "So now you're bound"> I liked most everything else abut this. The theme, the word usage and the rest of it. Nice work and glad to see you! ~ Gee.
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purple-hobbit

Mon, 2020-03-30 06:55

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I'm sorry I haven't been able to reply until now! I have been very busy at uni! But since I am back now, I will try to be a lot more active. I love that you all share my affection towards books in general and that you treasure the story of the book as well as the story within it! Thank you very much for your lovely comments!

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