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APOCALYPSE

APOCALYPSE

Pale yellow rays of a midnight moon
pierce through Earth’s dark secrets
to uncover mysteries seen only by those
of special perception.
and the stars, like frozen diamonds
transfixed in an indigo sky, cease all
movement, and the Universe known to man
shudders in dreadful anticipation
of the coming End Time
prophesied in Revelations.
man is blinded by his own importance
and is as one who is deaf to Heaven ‘s warnings.

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So very true and so very well put. Jx

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thank u, Jane . :)

joe

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I love the imagery at the beginning especially

Can I be cheeky enough to suggest a bit of a change to your last verses?
(I only can't help myself doing this if it is a poem I adore, so please forgive me )
And the Universe known to man
shudders in dreadful anticipation
of the prophesied Time.
Blinded by his own importance
he is deaf to Heaven‘s warnings.

Love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

will do :)

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