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Another Year Past

That the thought lingers still
The touch can still be felt
A perfume not smelt but felt
This is the order of the day

Why did I leave you there?
Then I feel that surge again.
A gentleness that makes blushes
A soft mind jog of things past

Tell me when to let memories go
I still need you to walk with me?
I can answer my own questions
The answer to all things is, stay.

I welcome you into my thoughts
Reaching out to see you there
I would love to know why we aged
Me in my body, you in my mind

Sweet days flow past my vision
Here you are, we are at eternal peace
I have decided that you must stay
You are a part of my every day.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
A tribute to a memory, or is it a reinforcing of that memory ???? There are things we can hold without harm to those around.
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to give a memory a tribute! I thought that is lovely.
At least with words we can inforce memories to stay. Thanks again for your gentle thoughts Ian.

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It is that time of the year again when past memories flit through my mind, and hold my love in a space only they can rest.
If Only????
Good to have lovely memories without the consequences of time, that seems sometimes to distort what you feel if held to long in one state.
You keep the good memories in your heart to live as you wish, Yours Ian.T

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ere nothing is left
except

loved

Thanks for your visit, yes to some memories are all they have but I am very lucky that I have each day a reality as well as the occasional trip into memory mode.
Thanks again young Bard, Yours Ian.T

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have been a maudlin "wouldacouldashoulda" piece. You have achieved a timeless beauty instead.
my reading-
http://vocaroo.com/i/s14yZ6RQsWOz

cheers,
Jess
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Once again thank you for the read, you made this whole and maybe only one or two words that need an edit.
Your comment was so well received, you have made my day.
Thanks again and look after that voice it is liquid gold,
Yours Ian.T

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So find more reasons to believe in others..

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