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"Another talk"

What shall I talk of, to you this evening?
Paltry little items to waste both our time's
Epic things to stir your shallow interest
No I just want to see you for what you are

What the hell do you want of me
Alright you need to know of my ways
That's a laugh as I can't relate to those
I think at an instants whim so what's next

Too much has passed my eyes to this day
To tell you in a few words, would fail both of us
You in your understanding of my ways,
and me in a feeling of being understated

Many things have been in my waking times,
the dream times I may have misunderstood
Were they part of my awareness or just a rest time?
Have you never wondered which is which?

Do you live in your awareness or in your dreams?
Can you tell the difference of these states,
where sometimes one is better, do we choose?
Shall I talk of reality or dreams to you.

Go think in your own space and then tell me,
how many are in your awakened state?
Do the takers of dreams scare your wake times,
now that I can drift into those spaces you have there.

Watch for me in those times where I can take you
Where you may ask will I be, in that open space
Dare you ask of me to treat you well in dreams,
it's too late, I am now in control just accept all.

Maybe I will be gentle with your mind,
or shift your thoughts to places you cannot find
I am the stealer of those souls that sleep
I may walk with you, but I now have your soul

If I let you wake today as that new sun rises
Will you remember me in there playing games
If you should not awake just remember,
that you are now a part of me always

I run hot or cold within your souls sleep
I capture your mind, sort thoughts things to keep
I will leave you as you read this piece in your wake,
think of me before the next sleep you take

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this piece refreshes

A walk on the dark side,
intertwined with a little light thoughts.
Just a fun write it gives me something to do but watch out when you sleep,
Yours Ian.T

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I love this.Shuuld I love your night visit or fear it? It doesn't matter much... what matters really is what you've penned here. I thought it's just one of your grat ones.
thanks for sharing.

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Just playing with words,
that may make the thoughts deeper lol
I will stand by your side as always,
No one can enter your Spirit it is eternity,
As always Ian.T

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lol. my soul is mine to keep.

talk to me of reality
a dream can be farfetched
when i'm deep in slumber
leave me to dwell in silence
you can walk with me there
but you can't touch my soul
i'm no prize for a thief
i have my guardians

Alid

Be careful that you sleep near the wall, and your partner on the outside to protect you lol,
I remember when in Africa the black people would put their beds on bricks so that the evil ones could not reach them while they slept.
But you have no worries unless you become badness, but even then your Spirit is safe as it is yours and your guardians are, from where we all return to, there is nothing here that can hurt them ??? Or is there lol,
Take care out there, Yours Ian.T

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my apologies.

cheers,
Jess
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Loved your comment at least it was true in that it came from your feelings, this piece was just a rambling of words, and as it was me writing then you should be use to it by now, I have taken some verbal Imodium.
You take care, we still love you, Yours Ian.T

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