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Another Song
See her awaiting in the wings
feel her gently tug at your heart strings
She is whispering words yet unclear
words she hopes that you will hear
Her thoughts are being tossed and thrown
to the watching wolves that howl and moan
She waits for the one that holds the key
never knowing who that one might be
Her heart knows where it should belong
still she knows that is another song
So watch her waiting in the wings
then feel as she gently tugs your heart strings
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Lavender
Sat, 2020-06-06 18:23
Another Song
Hi, Chrys,
This is beautiful! I feel it is the birth of a song.
Thank you,
L
c lynn brooks
Sat, 2020-06-06 19:31
lavender
Thank you so much. I wrote this for a very dear friend of mine who was an entertainer at the time
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lovedly
Sat, 2020-06-06 23:03
nice song
minor typo last line
lynn
c lynn brooks
Sun, 2020-06-07 14:00
lovedly
thank you
corrected the typo thanks for catching that
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Rula
Sun, 2020-06-07 03:18
Hello C lynn
A very tender song... I especially like the "waiting in the wing line". I thought you could spice this song up with more internal rhymes if you see what I mean.
Just an opinion dear. The choice is always yours.
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c lynn brooks
Sun, 2020-06-07 14:02
Rula
you are the 2nd person to call it a song it really isn't what would you suggest as far as spice lol seriously I'm open to all suggestions
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c lynn brooks
Sun, 2020-06-07 17:26
Alan
thank you taking the time
I did use your corrections but am still tossing waiting and awaiting around not sure awaiting is sitting with me
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tyro
Sun, 2020-06-07 17:33
there's a certain kind of
there's a certain kind of beauty here, it makes me dream of a pure innocents that one should never hurt.
T
The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight
c lynn brooks
Mon, 2020-06-08 07:35
Tyro
Thank you for your kind words
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c lynn brooks
Mon, 2020-06-08 07:39
Teddy
I saw the changes immediately and they are so subtle that bith versions sit well
thanks for your input
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