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Another Song

See her awaiting in the wings
feel her gently tug at your heart strings

She is whispering words yet unclear
words she hopes that you will hear

Her thoughts are being tossed and thrown
to the watching wolves that howl and moan

She waits for the one that holds the key
never knowing who that one might be

Her heart knows where it should belong
still she knows that is another song

So watch her waiting in the wings
then feel as she gently tugs your heart strings

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Hi, Chrys,
This is beautiful! I feel it is the birth of a song.
Thank you,
L

Thank you so much. I wrote this for a very dear friend of mine who was an entertainer at the time

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minor typo last line
lynn

thank you
corrected the typo thanks for catching that

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A very tender song... I especially like the "waiting in the wing line". I thought you could spice this song up with more internal rhymes if you see what I mean.
Just an opinion dear. The choice is always yours.

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you are the 2nd person to call it a song it really isn't what would you suggest as far as spice lol seriously I'm open to all suggestions

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thank you taking the time
I did use your corrections but am still tossing waiting and awaiting around not sure awaiting is sitting with me

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there's a certain kind of beauty here, it makes me dream of a pure innocents that one should never hurt.

T

The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight

Thank you for your kind words

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I saw the changes immediately and they are so subtle that bith versions sit well
thanks for your input

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