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another sad song fit for recent nightfall

and there was the sudden outpouring of cinders
creeping up my throat and wherever else they could escape
and smoldering still, I attempted to put them out myself
but too much salt will just feed this heat.

I remembered the taste of the tears I always tried to kiss away
and I can't tell what I miss about you
maybe it's more what I miss about myself.

I push the coals back and they slide, thick and painful
slowly down
to sit at the bottom of the growing pIt in my torso.
no amount of acquired muscle could hide
the blackness of it, now.

when I try to sleep without exhaustion threatening
I break.
all the pieces I haphazardly slapped back together
now fit more like sand.
small parts continuously tumbling downward
eventually they scatter
and I am a series of small broken bits again
until someone cups them in their hand
and guides it all back to where it should be
and that reminds me
I would be more fucking lost than ever
if it wasn't for tiah banks. jesus.

someone thank her for me.

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i love your poetry plaudits and you are a very beautiful gem yourself, i enjoyed the poems it flowe silky smooth, great work

I push the coals back down and they slide quickly and painfully
slowly back down' -- a little convoluted...
Perhaps something like
'I push against the coals and they slide quickly
and painfully

? '...the growing put in my torso' -- do you mean 'pit'

extremely well written this. I'm especially taken with the 4th stanza

Love judy

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

judy, thank you for catching my typo. i considered your suggestion and it has been duly edited! emeka, your kindness is appreciated.

thanks to you both,


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