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Another Dawn Dawns

Dawn of April
or
be it my only
Dawn
when she was young
and
we both in love
were war torn

you have dished out a poem of reality
all one needs to do is now
just think what is the whole truth
sure enough
you will beat me

as I don't believe in
SPIRITUALITY
my life swims on
the surf of human
REALITY

be as it may
I know when comes
my day
I will be merged with clay
somewhere far away
none know that pathway
it's different for each one
possibly we can this say

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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left out the element of rhyme in this. ~ Geezer.
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Geezer
its just natural

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a smooth transition from free verse to rhyme. It left one wondering what happened and brought me to re-read with that clouding the result of the poem. ~ Geezer.
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then I may have to rewrite it
and as not many devote more time to oldies
I feel twill be wasteful
I have reduced my poetry posting here
as you may have noticed
still I will c
thanks for your second coming

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