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Angels sings

There's angel love around me
Singing praises when in doubt,
Angel speaks, number sequences,
Nature's creatures knows my name.

Darkness and light fight it out,
Flickering in candle flames

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is this a particular form? It's really interesting! I'm not a religious person, but I believe in angels and spirits. I do believe our souls exist after death and believe we should be good people while we are on this earth, not for an eternal reward, but because it makes this life better for others and ourselves. It's the only life we're sure to have.

Something about "angel speaks, number sequence" is really fascinating to me. The alliteration is super cool, but it also reminds me of sacred geometry, which is a subject not many people address in poetry and not many artists utilize anymore.

I can't quite wrap my head around why "bodily stresses" is there though. It doesn't quite seem to fit the rest of the poem, like a connection or transition between that idea and the ones around it is missing. I'm not sure what I'd suggest, but I wanted to point it out in case you decide to make further revisions.

Hope you're doing well. The weather here in NC is all over the place and my body doesn't mind it (which is lucky, some folks get the worst allergies, migraines, etc. when the weather changes too quickly), but my brain doesn't care for it!

Kels

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i'm not religious anymore. but has been on a spiritual journey since aug 2017 and has is learning a lot about esoteric, angels, spirits, numerology and sacred geometry,. fascinating. i agree the bodily stresses don't fit, i used it anyway until the right word to come to me then i'll edit it. thanks for reading and sharing your thought on it.

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Darkness and light fight it out,
Flickering in candle flames

This is such a soft metaphor for the immense compression the human soul suffers

The question I put to you as a poet is.....do you want to allude to the human condition or do you want me to feel it through the power of your poetic invocation? Since you speak of sacred geometry and spirits why then not invoke the heavens and the hells; write dangerously, make your reader boil?

thanks for reading and giving your perspective . this piece is of the human condition . i'm not invoking anything hell or heaven, deity or spirits. i'm still learning about the esoteric world on my spiritual journey, so i don't want to invoke any dark energy i gotta fight with. im an angel from the royal family.

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when I say invoke I mean figuratively to explore what is with in you own psyche and to let the reader in ie, to move them Your right only an adept would ever invoke such forces

Best Z

yeah that's what i'm was doing. invoking what's in my psyche let readers in .

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Dear Barbara
I like your poem Angel sings. I too believe in Angels watching over us all. Instead of natures
creatures know my name you could say Heavenly creatures know my name.

Eulekia

thanks for the suggestion. heavenly creatures do sound better but i think its the creature below the heavens i was attempting to invoke . for ie i'm intune to the animals especially the flying creatures and insects spiritually, which i prefer to as knowing my name. the angels also know my but it's not my earthly name i would prefer to, tho both earth and heavens, on a spiritual plane, would know my esoteric name

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