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AND YOUR MEMORIES WILL LUSTRE LIKE GOLD

If the world had ears and we had but time,
To horn your love I would have picked some rhyme,
No encomiums I'd write is fit a praise
To adorn your halo with royal grace.

For to sing your praise we will need the town,
No eulogy, no poem is fit a crown;
You're the trophy, the meaning of my sport
And your tender kindness hit every spot.

You are like water to the throat that taste,
Scorched yam in the hands of hungry orphans;
You're Gear to the slow, Breaks to them that haste
You are my lamp when the darkness beckons.

You are soft silk on the loins of the cold
And your memories will luster like gold.

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I think you'll find there's no verb "to lustre" but I could be wrong.

xxx
Edna
Poet(ess) to the Stars

Said anything like that?

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"And your memories will luster like gold."
In that "lustre/luster" is used as a verb.
So yes!

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Edna
Poet(ess) to the Stars

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