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And so...

The game's afoot my dear Watson!
'Tis very plain to me
Do you see the progression of the plot
and the plan of Moriarty?

"I'm afraid not, Holmes
I think you have lost your mind"
Watson, surely you can see?
"I think you've started to unwind"

"Too many mysteries, you've unraveled
your habits too excess
I do not see the plot sir
I see him nor the villainess"

The walls have ears, dear Watson
Be careful what you say
His plan is slowly working
He's opened my mail today!

The proof is here, I see it!
The wax seal is counterfeit
He knows our every move it seems
"Holmes, you've too many China dreams!"

"Cry Wolf my friend, they won't believe"
Take a holiday or two
Lay off the pipe, the hypodermic
It will be good for you"

Meanwhile, the plot does thicken
Watson unaware
He doesn't see before his nose
He doesn't have a care

And so, the villainess and her master
dupe him once again
"Let loose the Hounds of Baskerville
release them from their chains!

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and the boys, LOL! I laughed so hard at this, I could almost see it as a skit on television or on stage! brutally funny... eddy says focus not your spyglass at my countenance! I will not be frying in your pan! my favorite lines are:

And so, the villainess and her master
dupe him once again
"Let loose the Hounds of Baskerville
release them from their chains!

I like your title, it is like something I would do, LOL! i really liked that the poem was fast paced right to the very end. at no place did it drag. I have no suggestions, not a word would I change. just a little reminder:
Anubis is not a Baskerville Hound, LOL!!!

*hugs, Cat

When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

SNL isn't it? [Saturday Night Live]. I enjoyed the writing of it almost as much as one might have read it. Thank you for the generous applause of my portrayal of Holmes and Watson's little skit. ~ Geez and the boys.
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Gee... I don't see my self competent to poke any of your lines. A master is always the master!

Onyinyechi Cosmos

The villainess & her master. Love it! I've decided it's Cat & myself! LOL!

regards

One.

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"with all that I am & all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me"

is based on fictional characters, the story-line is not representative of any actual conversations and may be interpreted as one wishes. Thank you for the read and comment. With significant regards, ~ Sir Gee.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

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