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Alouette

Bonne nuit ma petite alouette.
Tu me manques.
Lorsque la lune est morte
Tu voleras encore.

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Translation doesn't tell it true, I will try to fathom out what you are saying:-

I will hide my face from you.
I miss you.
Yet as the Moon dies
I will see you fly

Bonnet harms my small lark.
I miss you.
When the moon died
You will still fly.
I suppose I could translate this in many ways it is fun but I would rather you tell me what you are trying to say lol
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Oops. Your comment has lead me to notice a typo. I have edited it.

TRANSLATION:
Good night my little lark
I miss you
When the moon dies you will fly again.

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Your poetry holds a simple beauty as does Pangur Bán.
Words that can give a peace to a mind or raise good thoughts
Are beautiful in themselves,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

I really appriciate that. Do you know if any new workshops will be starting soon?

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Weirdelf is starting a workshop tomorrow or today it will be interesting as it deals with Originality, and as I think you write from that inner self your works are mostly Original in their beauty and formation,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

THANKS A TON :).

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The AC is being re voted this month then I think you will find some new workshops staring.
Have a look at Wesley's works for the Long epic's
Barbara's for a taste of short verses in couplets , also her everlasting Renga workshop.
These three are fun, and nothing against you starting your own not how you go about that though.
Take care and keep your writing true to your thoughts, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

How can I start one? Do I have to be a premium member?

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