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Alone

That feeling deep inside that's hidden by a simple side smile
the one you try to make last awhile the one
that you feel deep in your gut and the deeper you cut feels harder to reach for
to make those feelings slide deep away in a place you cant feel anymore because in your loneliness when you push so far inside you feel comforted by yourself and the reason you feel comforted is because in the end the only person you can count on is you
the only person who wont give up on you, is you.
when this happens and all you can think as your walls are crashing down around you and you escape into the place you built as your own safe hiding is I'm going to be okay.
I will get out of this one day, and even if it takes awhile its okay because for the time being I'm safe. I
'm safe and alone
but I'm home.

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I feel it could do with a little editing for cadence, format and readability but it is an amazing first post.

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cheers,
Jess
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