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Almost There

Call me baby
Text me if you want to
Let me know you’re ready
For me

Can you feel me on the stair
Hear me climbing
Up the darkness
Rising to your need?

Text me baby
Call me
Tell me what you want
From me

Are you waiting in the easy chair,
Or are there rose petals
Strewn across the floor
To our waiting bed?

Call me baby
Text me now
Pursue your pleasure
On me

Will you beg my love,
Shudder in the graze of skin
Demand my tongue, my thrusts
And pull me down into your ecstasy?

Call me baby
Text me
All you want and need,
Please…

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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title and a glance at the phone-sex market? The pseudo rhyme and the pattern reflects the mood of such a phone-call-thing. The beginning is of a customer that knows what they want and the ending; the caller being dominated by the receiver. [They way I see it]. I like the idea of using the warning that this is Adult, Erotic, and you are free to use it anytime you feel the need, but I didn't think it was necessary this time. I do believe that it is well within the limits of decency. ~ Gee.
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decency
till foreplay maybe

thereafter
sexiness forgets
all
experience speaks
you can't be naive

This was done pretty nicely and with the times I do believe.
But jeesh man, Adult Erotic? lol my contest entry should be XXX lmao
I read the poem non-stop.. great writing.
The title does bring up important issues regarding content though.
Issues that I doubt will ever be dealt with do to the mechanics of the site.
Who wants to wreck their title with additional mumbo jumbo though.
How to get all to adhere to 'the honor system'?
I'm afraid it will be an issue never resolved.
We are certainly a culture unto our own here on Neo, yes?
Perhaps a banner someday..."We do not censure. Enter at your own risk". lol ..I don't know.
Cool read.
Later,

~Mark~

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if you don't have the music, show it to someone who has. It's where the money is too!

Based on your reading list you know what poetry is. Good lyrics are equally important to me as poetry, and I'm not passing judgement. I can't write them.
But there is a difference, like between watercolor and oil painting. Lyrics are transparent and easy, with repetitions, and catchy phrases...often about getting together to do the nasty...poetry..well as Dorianne Laux: put it “All poetry is preparation for death” (not quite true, but somewhat)

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

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