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This Almost Kiss

Submitted by Jasmine. on Sun, 2016-10-30 02:13

How does love speak
In the deep soulful stillness
Were madness melts in bliss
As tears fall on warm sin

Love comes like a whisper
Only your lips breath
Upon my lips - I am
Haunted by this almost kiss

Lover comes quietly as rain drops
In the soft warm dark
This love a moment known
In a moment gone

Like the air between your fingertips
Quietly as rosebuds
Talk to thin air

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Sun, 2016-10-30 09:05

up here juice is steroids
further north u go the
mining towns and gyms
its as popular as the
supplements

svelte with words
maybe the rain
Like the air between
your fingertips
an excellent
line!

Thank U!

Mr Wolf!

Sun, 2016-10-30 11:45

Nice imagery. Well done.

Alid

Sun, 2016-10-30 12:33

this took my breath away...fantastic depth to this imagery!

always, Cat

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Tue, 2016-11-01 19:01

a fantastic write in troubled
times...

Mr Wolf!