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Alll My Lettuce...

Alll my lettuce, I will give to youuuuu
Alll my lettuce, I will give to youuuuu
You've asked me for mine and I say that is fine
Alll my lettuce, I will give to youuuuu

At the burger joint, where we have just ate
We had the big burgers and said they were great
A soda and fries and I won't tell you no lies
The catsup was missing and I was really pissing

But alll my lettuce, I will give to youuuu
Alll my lettuce I will give to youuuu
Alll my lettuce, alll my lettuce....

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Structured: Western
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Just having a little fun, the wife and I ate BK today while we out to shopping today and I was going to ask for my sandwich without lettuce and she said, just get it and you can put it on my sandwich. This poem was born in that moment! LoL
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lol. It's so funny where we find inspiration isn't it! Glad to hear you're out and about now after we have all been stuck at home.
Do you keep a pen and paper handy everywhere you go just incase? This is a fun one of this was mine I'd call it lettuce for two. But that's just me. Nice to see some comedy.

Thank you...Teddy

its fun for me
we three
lol
Gee

say HIGH
to mommy
kindly

and when we went yesterday, we left early to get a jump on the heat, so we didn't have breakfast. Lunch time was close and we were passing BK. They have window service only, so we sat in the car to eat. Not too much fun, but oh well. The radio had played a Beatle tune a little while ago... and there you have it. Most times I have paper and pen handy, but sometimes not. Thanks for stopping by. ~ Geezer.
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I can only say, well, I'll be horn swagged, as we, in the wooly wild west, like to say. Kidding!
When I read your ditty, I thought of "Oh where, oh where/ Has my little dog gone? /Oh where, oh where can he be?" Try humming "Alll my lettuce, I will give to youuuuu" and you might have the latest hit. Now that darn tune will stick in my mind all day. (that's all I needed, lol.) Now go and eat your lettuce, like any other wabbit would. Jerry

Hello, Geezer!
A lot of fun here, and very clever!
I tried to add to this, but couldn't match your wit, so I decided to Lettuce Be.
Thank you for some much needed jocularity!
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have you laughing. Have you read, The Devil's Ride? I figure you might like that
~ Geezer.
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Honest critique and comments shouldn't hurt.
It's why we are here, to get better at our craft.

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