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Alligators in a Sewer

It was a seven footish prehistoric reptilian sewer fish.
Illegal it was, a greenish pet, tied in a cess of a pool with a dish.
He was no bish, but a huge bass-tard, held at bay for many a year.
Nobody knew, else they might sue, knowing the situation as queer.

Imagine, but who in the world would go near the waste end of that yard.
An occasional treat like snake, or box turt, for him from this drunk bard,
I would dare as a pet keep endangered dinosaur staked on a leash.
They wept as they examined it’s death premature whilst they munched their quiche,

and weighed it in at one thousand pounds this walking fish never unfed.
If only surrendered to the state twould still have life in its old head.
But lo and behold to be kept so unclean was its death it did seem.
Belly up he went with the welts from the sewage from passed on Jim Beam.

His brother was found in another town and of the same messy pail.
By jail I went where not one single shot to have nor even an ale.

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You are priceless making it worth my while.
It is the toughest challenge IMO but I hope I got it.
Thank you Teddy (and Mr. Geezer) [and Nat Geo. for the technical stuff]
Late(or) Gator,

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The kind of friends that you thank when you are all grown up and finally realize their value.
Thank you Sir Alan,

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hahahaha
lol tired of that word bish and kind of insulting too hmm lol and it weren't no mutt.
hahaha
byeeeeeeee
but first a big MUAH for you with your gentle ways.
(see what they mean to me)
LOL

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toothy grin for the prehistoric, walking fish that got you locked up with nary a beer!
~ Geez.
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Thanks Gee,

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