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ALL THE KING'S HORSES

Submitted by Geremia on Fri, 2012-08-10 14:03

ALL THE KING’S HORSES

whirling dervish in a spin
far from the world I live in.
a sudden fall.
sparkling mirrors
of Murano
all
in refraction
a thousand broken
pieces I see
of me.

Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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magics02

Sat, 2012-08-11 12:21

How are you my friend? I am happy to see you here and missed reading your work. I hope all is going well for you and thought about you the other day wondered how you were doing. I am happy to see you here. God Bless you friend. Long lost Mona:)

I like your poem here!!

Geremia

Sat, 2012-08-11 13:22

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Thanks, Mona. Good to see YOU.

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magics02

Sat, 2012-08-11 14:43

Joe and I see you are actively writing again which is great. I came in today to see how everyone is

Geremia

Sun, 2012-08-12 13:34

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Always good to hear from you--as many times as you want :)

Thanks,

Joe

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weirdelf

Thu, 2012-08-16 01:17

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This is an example of the title totally enhancing the poem.

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Geremia

Thu, 2012-08-16 04:04

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Yes, you said that about my last poem. I realzed how the title explains so succinctly the body of poem without writing further verses to clarify.

thanks, mate :)

Joe

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