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alight my dear you are home

You can think alone when times train …or spacecraft…takes you there …your final destination arrives …reaching ones destination is not always as exciting…. as is the sojourn …your journey …alone you have by now...through tunnels of time have gone… and sad enough to say …though you have alone found your way… there will be no one …no Baldies …nor Godly …no kith …nor kin … no fat one …nor thin … no damsel …no damned guy …all would have already wished you a very happy forever goodbye… you shall alight at the junction of eternity…where there will be no fraternity…. only your own God implanted in imagination …
a SPIRITUALITY …which shall help you to lean upon… if your minds imaginary skeleton is still strong…...all interred in the bonfires here …go it alone my very friendly dear….
There will be… neither omen …nor Amen….. well ‘tis all left in the garbage of actuality bins out here…with my truthful sayings… friend do kindly adhere…
I will also be fairly near… but there too I will not …
ever you hear

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Free verse
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Comments

Love the contrast of high and low language and the form of prose poetry you created.
The reader leaves the poem with a very intense take-away. It is written with "the blood"
nice work!

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

What an honour
coming from a poet like you
Thanks again
I am humbled

author comment

I am a person of few words.....but wow ....i really like your poem

Your use of ellipsis instead of line breaks intrigues me. I kind of think it should end with the line "only your own God implanted in imagination …" Just my opinion, but it would leave the poem's ending as open as its beginning. Either that, or continue with "A Spirituality …There will be neither omen …nor Amen" and then end it there.

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