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AFTER THE LOVING

Let me lay my head upon your breast
and feel the beat of your dear heart
slowly matching that within my chest
as the sweaty heat slowly departs.

Goose bumps dimple in the dark
while quickened breaths begin to slow.
A dog outside begins to bark
which won't affect the afterglow.

We'll talk of inconsequential things
and laugh of events in the past
and the honesty which old love brings
as facades fall away at last.

Our fingers trace each other's curves
in comfortable familiarity
tracing the routes of passion's nerves
and years of loving memories.

Then sweat's sheen dries and our skin chills
causing covers to hide you from me
and almost against our wills
sleep finally comes and sets us free.

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This isn't about just fucking excuse my french its about all the little things that gather you both together going into it, there's a certain tenderness and vulnerability like the writer was loath to put some of those words on the page, maybe shyness, whatever it is it really is beautiful

You should be very very proud of this poem

Kudos

You sis J xo

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

I tried my best to keep the eros without being even slightly pornographic. Pleased to see i succeeded. And in my limited experience it's what happens before and after the sex which makes it meaningful. Thank you for taking time to visit...........stan

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Loved this one in its tenderness and depicting the age of the two so subtly Compact and full of quiet emotion, Well written, Yours Ian..

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Always good to see you've dropped by........stan

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yes Stan 'tis
and at this age
such tenderness you emit
I wonder what twas
when you were young
jussss 19
lovely

Excellently written, captures those moments perfectly. Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

I have no idea how I missed your comments. Perhaps they came when my comp was down? But I see them now while reviewing some of my stuff and appreciate them both.......stan

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Our fingers trace each other's curves
in comfortable familiarity
tracing the routes of passion's nerves
and years of loving memories

just so exotic even now stan.

I sometimes don't realize I came here over 7 years ago when I decided to start writing again. Or was it 8? Oh well, time does accelerate with age doesn't;t it?

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Oh well, time does acceleratexxxxx
with age doesn't;t it?
oooooo no
it SLOWS
each day is far too long
wonder when they will ring the gong
lol
be happy
time to enoy still
but have a strong will

A minor edit brought this back up and I'm pleased you like it

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