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ACROBATICS :updated

Submitted by Geremia on Sat, 2015-03-21 12:24

ACROBATICS

On a flying trapeze
high in a summer breeze
no net below to catch my fall
I ride Life's winds
no cares at all.

I live for the joy
of the moment
and never look down
into the darkness I know

Time flies with me
and I hold on
as long as I can
but I'm starting to fall
again

you won't hear a sound;
no thud, no sigh
no weeping eyes
will follow me down.

Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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raj

Sat, 2015-03-21 14:27

very touching indeed...

be well dear friend..

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

Geremia

Sat, 2015-03-21 16:39

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Thank you, good friend.

joe

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wesley snow

Sat, 2015-03-21 21:33

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Don't know what you're going to do with it. It's quite special as is.

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Geremia

Sun, 2015-03-22 10:39

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I need to eliminate last line and polish up some aspects of the piece..

thank you, Wes

joe

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