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The Absurdity Of Word.....

The Absurdity Of Word...

Sharp intake of breath as I pass
the Sunday worshippers, with
their spotless dogs roaming at
their freshly shined hews.
Or maybe not.

Won't be long now till I’m
home drying the mutts with
their own howl this time,
listening to the blues.
it’s all I got.

The hills I’ve walked upon today
won't ever produce the rivers of
Babylon, but they stretch five
hundred miles in dreams alone.
I do give it little thought.

There’s more to be gleaned up there
than in all the temples, churches, or
triangulated square halls of destiny,
even shades a smart phone.
This can’t be bought.

Time alone won't bring us the
answers that we seek, after all
we educate but never seem to
learn from our history.
Our greed will not diminish.

Perhaps if we stopped looking
skywards, seeing the true worth of
a planet unique, we’d understand
It’s majestic mystery.
The prophet of profit may finish.

A sea change must begin in mountain
rivers, touching village, town and city
as it flows, inspiring confidence of
voice while every species grows.
It's there under your nose.

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That piles of bricks and sticks don't hold any answers. Much better to seek god or guidance in the wonders of nature...........stan

First line of second stanza "Won't"

Thank you Stan, good to hear from you again, hope you're doing well. Fixed the typo's and had a re-think and changed a couple of things. Thanks again, Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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I also admire the deft and confident wordcraftsmanship, I just had to do a reading. If it's ok may I post it to our Neopoet Facebook page?
https://soundcloud.com/neopoet/the-absurdity-of-word-by-roscoe-lane
Are you on Facebook? Can't seem to find you there. How about other social media? We have a presence on most of them.

Not sure about the title. Also the line
even shades a smart phone.
I know what you mean but could it be said differently? Even
it even shades a smart phone.

cheers,
Jess
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Thank you Jess, and please feel free to post on social media. I will give the title some thought. I am on face book under my real name. Find the dog. Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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