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Abbott's Legacy - Killing Humanity

Submitted by Seren on Tue, 2015-07-07 15:07

Like an upright bowl
the moon hangs filled
with starry light

sparkling in your eyes
Stained glass celestial orbs
consume the night sky

beings of mercy swim
in poisoned clear blue waters
I've watched the death of innocence

sunburned noses turn north
far along the rabbit proof fence
they search for nirvanas shores

in beds of dirt and grass
they hunger for the purest water
to fill the belly of their soul

jackaways swoop tearing holes in heaven
spears of the light of illumination
carress the heart of the world

imagining tomorrows on dreamy seas
little brown hands grasp grass blankets
protecting satin skin from injection

in huts of mud peoples commune with gods
Riki tiki shakes bones from crowns thorns
yesterday is in eyes not wanting tomorrow

humanity calls with her bag of tricks
pressing the hard sold achlmey of science
failing to bind their wounds they flee

a blessing would be the unclothed hamartia
ego calls again to the weak and weary
following the death of a modern world

Yet forgotten customs rise their heads
they seek golden shores of opportunity
only to be turned back with a tryants buck

sitting on the shores disappointed hosts
pack away a welcome mat head lowered,
ashamed of Queen and Country, yet again

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Tony Abbott is our Prime Minister I'm very ashamed to say ... read up on him yourself you'll see what I meen.
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

Comments

alidzain

Tue, 2015-07-07 16:01

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hi jayne, love this one too. The people who are on the seat of power can be easily disillusioned if they don't have a strong will and a sense of responsibility and humanity. here's another point of view.

A monster with a human face sitting on the throne
innocence died, trampled by iron fist of tyranny.
Who is to blame for giving him his power?
Tell me who are the author of this tragedy?

Peace has been betrayed in this land
The future, if we still have it, will be stained,
poisoned by the powerful scum of man
I won't accept that this has been preordained!

If justice has been shredded apart,
let vengeance be the blade I wield!
An assassin driven by a broken heart,
running straight to the killing field

But the truth halted my steps
and I fell on my knees
It is us who grant him power he used
to bring a nightmare to reality.

Hope you're well
Alid

Seren

Tue, 2015-07-07 16:21

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Though I love your take on it ... I think it gives more power to a man hungry for power you put him on a throne that he doesn't deserve and that he will never have in this country he'd have to throw out our Constitution he's a bully and an ignorant fool and that's how I'm going to try and portray him in another poem I am working on

Thanks so much for taking thr time to have a stab at the subject matter ... he's a full on ignoramus and I cant wait till we don't have the shame of him representing our country overseas I've never been a Labour voter but after this debacle.

As you can see this subject fires me up lol

Much love and big hugs J xox

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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alidzain

Tue, 2015-07-07 17:55

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my poem is meant for the people who supported him and grant him power to realise that they share the blame of his actions. God forbid it that I will be a supporter of such a man, my friend. The people must realise their folly or this madness will happen again. He is wrong , butso are those who gave him that power. They put their trust in him and this is what they get.

Alid

Seren

Tue, 2015-07-07 18:02

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I understand your meaning my friend i didnt mean it that way my ire got me lol I really fire up on this subject this is nothing a bit of fluff the real stuff comes later ... its not nice you might want to check under the bed before you read it

It scares even myself and I'm writing jt ... just the thought of the scum bag on a throne makes my blood boil Lmao !!

Much love Jayne xox

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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weirdelf

Tue, 2015-07-07 21:17

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You tried to be poetic when you could have named specifically his utter fundamentalist ideological cruelty and lies.

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Seren

Tue, 2015-07-07 22:09

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Where would I be able to improve it in your opinion ?

Or useless ? If so so be it ... and I tried to be poetic ?

Really ... well ok ...

Jayne

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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Eduardo Cruz

Fri, 2015-07-17 13:16

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When it comes to political leaders, our poetry must be direct and strong to show our rancor. You have captured your thought, but I feel that there is not enough edge on your word. Show how truly upset you are with the lies and rhetoric. I feel your passion in your comments, but it falls short in your poem. Slam the bastard, if that was what you meant...
I know nothing of the man, I do not want to look him up. make me feel the distain you feel in your poetic rant.

Eddie C.

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