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72-120 Millimeter Mistake

Narcissistic inhalation
Autoerotic asphyxiation
Destroying the body's natural state
Die slowly die quickly why wait?

Claiming to want to be a parent
Poisoning the organs of possibility
Black tumors upon your transparent
Fucked yourself to infertility

How you'll cry, why why why
Clearly marked with surgeon warning
Puffed and passed to get your high
No child for you enjoy your mourning

Fresh out of sympathy for your calamity
Begged for a single second of your health
Search not here for any sign of amity
You robbed yourself of maternal wealth

Your arterial clogs as hard as granite
From smoke to drugs you did as you please
What pity you'll beg from all of the planet
For you're the mother who's never to be

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can tell me what inspire this poem, my friend?

Alid

I wrote this poem for the young people like me. The girls mostly but the guys should take notes as well. I did a philosophical session where I sat down and tried to pinpoint why I can not spend my life with a smoker. Besides the obvious, the smell, the second hand, the yellowing of skin...I went past all that to find the reason I personally could never be with this genre of woman is that someday we may want to have kids, or possibly have a happy accident. In the uterus of a smoker I would be in constant agony and forever afraid of what may happen to my unborn child. Now obviously the human body is very different person to person but smoking is never going to HELP a pregnancy along. It will only hurt the situation in one way or another. Obvious or not. Then I thought of all the people who I knew who were getting pregnant from highschool, all of them smoked. Many had lost one, or had scares of losing it. I don't believe them to be for to be parents. I would sacrifice everything if I were to have a child. Right now people are making mistakes that will affect the rest of their life and they are hiding behind comments like "whatever I'm still young" or "its my body". Then these same people will expect you to feel sorry when they lose a baby. Or are infertile. What a tragedy. How dare they call it a tragedy and make it all about them when they have been destroying themselves from the inside out. A quick sidebar, anyone who has lost a child who would've been a good parent and didn't put selfish useless base need first when they were young in preparation for their future I can not even begin to describe the sympathy from within I feel for you. I wish anyone in that situation all the best in their pursuit for mother (or fatherhood). Thanks for your interest Alid

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I get you but I'm thinking with so many smokers around, its tough for guys like I us to make a choice. I'm thinking that most people are naive in their younger days. I'm one of them, though I didn't smoke.As we mature, our perceptions change and yeah I do feel sorry for them because by the time they realized their mistakes, its too late. It is for this reason, I won't judge them. I'm not fit to judge them. All I can do, is to advice or offer alternaives to help them with their bad habits. The rest its up to themselves.

Alid

Ago I would have agreed. But we are told basically since birth in TV ads and anti smoking propaganda in schools and warnings right on the pack of smokes. Yet more and more people start everyday. The same people who swore as children they wouldn't. They sell out. A plethora of warnings and they still light it up...and then expect my sympathy when they can't quit...no one made them start smoking. They consciously made the decision. They knew what they were doing. So how can I feel sorry for someone who was warned daily and still decided to bring that hell on themselves? I ignore it mostly but its hard to when someone wants to preach their lung cancer story and then tell you they've been smoking since they were 9. Pain often is not a choice, but in this instance it is. I am not sorry for people who have complications due to smoking. This is my ode to that idea

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Indeed, there are those who do not deserve the right to being a parent. Enjoyed the read........stan

I had wanted originally to touch on the idea that even if they did get pregnant the birth complications nicotine and tobacco could cause but I felt it was better to save this for another time. This poem I was afraid of making cramped so when I got past 4 stanzas I decided to bring it home and not epic this one. I didn't want to force anything.

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