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The 19th

It was the golden month,
A nurturing time,
Where I looked to words with ambitious eyes,
But the haze of the cold was strong,
Menacing to the young slicks adept to the warmth of California.

So I only wrapped myself in clouded thoughts,
Safe in what I knew,
Walking around all cool,
Acting all mad with poetry,
Not sure if everyone could figure it out,
Though I was content with my own ideas.

Yes,
It was a golden time,
Just before July,
A soft and holy time,
Nothing to be confused by,
No clichés,
Just the sweet vibes floating freely,
Just that sweet dew of the morning which I love dearly,
And I wrapped myself in those sweet words,
If only for a little while,
Here in my California.

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A soft write that flowed well,
and had meaning in there of being,
held in a beaut day.
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

A day in your life however dull or cold, brought to life with these words. Well written with feeling. Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

cheers,
Jess
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That was really cool. It was interesting to hear it out loud, as I usually don't read certain poems out loud to people. But this was really nice.

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