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• She is Judas •

I'm a stick of cigarette to you,
you light me,
smoke me,
and march me rough with shoe.

I trusted you
and wanted to wed you ,
you drank the palm wine
of a stranger and bed with him

they told me you did but I was
Thomas,
I never knew you were Judas.

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isn't here yet. At least you know the truth! Better to know than to wait with false expectations! I think the word you want is: mash not marsh.
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Thanks. The word is march.

Collins

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You are here too...

I read this again after I did on Facebook, it's interesting and I'll add nothing to Geezer's prescriptions...

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My brother I'm here with you. Thanks for your contribution..Collins.

Collins

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"and march me rough with shoe." or "mash me" rough with shoe." Either way, that is a flawed sentence. Sorry. Jerry

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