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• I'm scared •

|The fear of a Soldier in a Country|

I'm scared
not of the stone I'll be,
buried by sand under the soil.

I'm scared
not of the demon I saw with seven heads
nor by darkness that dimmed at my sight,
or even by sound of gun.

I'm scared
not of the arrow fired in the sky,
to pierce my body.

I'm scared,
scared for the star
that fell in the grieved land
I call home,
where dogs bark
they see no bones.

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Not much to offer by way of suggestions. Reads okay as it stands I think.
Well themed and well written in my book so well done.
(Might have used 'afraid' instead of 'scared', Stanza 4, L2 ~ don't know though)

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May I suggest trying the word afraid in place of scared only becaue it softens the sound of the line. Either way a good write

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but a little bit vague in spots. "Where dogs bark, they see no bones"? I think it refers to some faction that does a lot of talking but can't quite get the job done? ~Geezer.
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