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• If I must confess •

|To the woman I love|

If I must confess
Today I prefer be a fisher man
with no hook and bait
but with my basket of many holes
Where air breathe life

For I have caught
many a born unworthy fish with net
and they back themselves on water

If I must confess
You wear me new smiles,
attire and bid
since you came..

If I must confess
My love for you you can't count,
They are in holes of basket...

I'm ready to be a farmer
with hoe and cutlass
And to fill my basket of many holes
with cocoyam, vegetable and pepper
To keep us live with the taste of my love.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 


I think that this onbe needs a helping rewrite it is put in a way of your thoughts ..
We have to start with sorting those out and then ordering them into a stanza group ..
I will copy this one and if I can see the picture you are painting then I will try and write it again.
As this piece is it is hard to follow but we can together sort out a sequence where it will apply to all readers ,
Yours as always Ian ...

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