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Consciousness - A challenge.

I've watched a couple of Youtubes lately that have really challenged my ideas of conciousness, soul, thought. "The Primacy of Consciousness" by Peter Russell https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-d4ugppcRUE (an hour long but very worth watching). "Consciousness Can be Quantified" by Michio Kaku: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=erSd5xep30w, and "Noam Chomsky confronted by right wing twat" https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kbL5L4r4Ars

I would like to issue a challenge, to write a poem, whether agreeing or disagreeing in part or full with the polemics presented here.

Anything from haiku to grandiose allegorical manifesto.

Anyone interested? The videos alone are worth watching.
cheers
Jess

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Not sure if I'm adept at responding to your challenge, but you have ignited a spark like flint on flint.

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

Let's see what happens, like the Phoenix arising from the ashes of yesterday's thoughts or perhaps the Kraken emerging from the muddy depths of the deep unconscious.

cheers,
Jess
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Thanks for your encouraging comment. I have posted today "Ruins", not sure if it fits the bill. If not, please let me know the shortcomings.

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

I will have to watch and see what u can come up with....

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

Carrie, I was hoping other people would come up with it. My poor battered old brain is only good as a banderilla or muleta.

cheers,
Jess
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Consciousness

Did I not scream when you burnt me?
Is this the action of a conscious mind?
Are you seeking the Holy Grail or a concept?
Do I have to shake you till you bleed?

Don’t bother me with such basic talk
I have needs to be aware of my self
Where is my self I ask of you in fear?
Are you so perfect to rebuke my own faith?

You have held my think in awe of the unknown.
Are you sure that this is a sane conscious way?
Do you really exist as to test your own being?
Why do you think that you are alone in this?

All things become part of the whole at some time.
Why do you question my own awareness of self?
Put yourself to the test, shut off all those senses.
What do you feel will this place even exist after a while?

There is a great difference in complete lack of senses,
Try this death thing and do you think it is the same?
No senses no feelings, a body that is devoid of all things.
This is your perceived death and its shadow on your soul.

Oh so you talk of a soul now I wonder where that is.
We talk of someone touching our souls. How is that?
Talk to me of things that I cannot touch, you never learn.
The soul is not of your body, it is of you in your searching.

Separate entities joined only by a wish to be physical
To learn of many things, where you need a body to do
Have I really got to tell you as a child which way is up?
Only in death will you become aware of the separation.

Talk to me for as many hours as you wish think will be
The energy and unconditional love of us, will be with you.
What do you want of us? “I am tired of holding your hand”
Time a millennium of tic, toc, no such thing in our space

Better now that you realise that all things, even the rocks
Those beneath your feet have a consciousness of their being
Are they not made as you are a few twirling atoms in space
At this I a small voice in my inner thoughts said..

“Your welcome Granddad”

.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

exactly

cheers,
Jess
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why all the rhetoricals?
Give me answers.
I demand absolute, unshakeable, undeniable proof.
Or do I?

cheers,
Jess
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Thanks to you I could watch the YouTube on Primacy of Consciousness by Peter Russell which is indeed thought provoking.

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

I can go to Google to check a spelling, be caught by a link to something interesting that leads to a discussion that undermines my basic principles.
Then suddenly a whole day is gone and I didn't finish reviewing your poem.
Quel dommage!
Also the wondrous entanglement of life itself

cheers,
Jess
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