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The Anglesea Barracks Angel

Where the accepted cannon's line of sight
converges on a school, and sizes up
it's next target recruits

Where the only wounded soldier limps past
by inches as a victim of circumstance
in the war that tobacco won

Where, farther down the harbour road
no warships are in sight
above the church spires

Only superliners blot out the light
of ornate buildings that remind us,
tourists are tramping near

It's gargantuan nose nuzzles our
ragged shore, but
there are no fatalities here

Comments

Good to be on an Island safe from most things in the world except Politicians, you are so lucky.
Good write, I looked up your use of Farther in one of your lines, this can be used or the other twin further, to me the later is more gentle though both mean the same.
Have a look at the Oxford dictionary for these differences and there you will find several Ideas for future use.
Take care out there, Yours, Ian..

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