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Simply

Submitted by tbeaudet on Thu, 2011-02-17 10:55

Simply

I didn’t want to hurt you
I never meant for you to grieve
I'm sorry that I made you cry
It wasn’t you I had to leave

I had no time to say good bye
My pain severe and so, so real
I simply didn’t have a choice
So this end, I had to steal

I had to stop bloodcurdling screams
Haunting me each day and night
Tormenting me through all my dreams
Poisoning my strength to fight

Just remember that I love you
And forever I will be
Standing right beside you
Forgive me, my destiny

So cherish all the good times
Hold your breath and hear my voice
“I never wanted to leave you…
I simply didn’t have a choice”

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Written for a friend who's dad took his own life... Written awhile back, figured I'd post to try out new site and get some feedback.
Editing stage: 
Editing - polished draft

Comments

Kailashana2

Thu, 2011-02-17 11:40

HEY! WELCOME BACK!

Your poem could be another version of Lennon's *jealous guy*... sadly.... I could almost hear your whistling.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6lLs2dC9NaE

~A

Sparrow

Wed, 2015-06-17 18:27

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This is a singing lament but with other pieces we can see if there are things to correct, this is from 4 years ago so I shall wait for an updated version, Yours Ian.T

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