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Where are you?...

I've looked for the part that's missing
and damned if I can see
where it might have gotten off to
Where it might be wandering free

It's like, that it just needed space
Some time to be alone
A little time for reflection
The waters marred by stones

I cannot find the peace
that once I took for granted
My outlook seems to shift
from level, to something canted

I've been searching all around,
no signs do I find
of the part that has gone missing
Has it been left behind?

I know that it was right here
where I saw it last
But now it's gone from my sight
leaving only shadows cast

Today's the day I'll find it
I have to... I must believe
I keep searching, tracking, hoping
My heart begins to grieve

Damn! This is annoying
That empty space, it sure does glare
I wish I knew what to look for
It's just got to be somewhere

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an anxious piece. Hopefully questing. This one line bothers me:

It's like, that it just needed space
I think it could be changed to:

It's like it's needed space
that's just a suggestion.

I do like these lines best:

Today's the day I'll find it
I have to... I must believe
I keep searching, tracking, hoping
My heart begins to grieve

always, Cat

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you have made a great concoction of "commotion".."anguish"...."confusion".."unrest" ..and topped it off with "hope" all the way which keeps all of them at bay..that's the way i perceived it.. a very nice message you have communicated through this write because "hope" gets us through all the tough times...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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