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A treat for The Girls
A farmers work aint easy
It’s an ‘ard and lonely life
I never gets to town much
So its ‘ard to find a wife
I’m up at dawn most every morn
A milking an’ a feeding
Then afternoons I’m in the fields
A ‘oeing an’ a weeding
So when the sun goes down at night
The working day be done
I’ll go down to the sheep pen
Just to pick a pretty one
They sees me in my wellies
And they all begin to bleat
They knows that I am there to give,
Some special girl a treat
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Norfolk, UK
Favorite Poets
Kipling, T.S Eliot, Hilaire Belloc, Ogden Nash, Spike Milligan and many more.
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Candlewitch
Mon, 2011-10-17 12:48
LOL!
Food for thought! Quite well penned.
always, Cat
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shazbat
Fri, 2011-11-25 15:30
Thank you Cat, nice to know
Thank you Cat, nice to know you enjoyed it
John
author commentloved
Mon, 2011-11-21 13:37
beautiful i 'll msg u another version on past experience only
after you okay it by sms//msg i mean
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shazbat
Fri, 2011-11-25 15:35
Thanks for stopping by, John
Thanks for stopping by,
John
author commentwesley snow
Mon, 2011-11-21 22:09
Shit howdy.
This one should've garnered more comments by this time. I usually restrict myself to comment on the poem's structure itself as opposed to subject matter. This poem fairly screams for me to stick to that plan.
Excellent poem. Only a couple of lines did I feel a forced meter and the rhyme scheme is superb. Because of the dialect, I might have dropped the "g" on feeding/weeding. You may have kept the "ing" pronunciation to keep from going overboard with the accent. If that's the case, I wouldn't worry about it. The poem could easily handle it.
A very sick little poem. I like it.
A lot.
wesley
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shazbat
Fri, 2011-11-25 15:34
Well Wes, I had considered
Well Wes, I had considered knocking off a few Gs but thought it might be a bit OTT
Glad you enjoyed it.
John
author commentlou
Sat, 2011-11-26 02:12
Hi
i can imagine Pam Ayres reading this lol not that she usually reads poetry about bestiality.
Well rhymed , but sick
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
loved
Sat, 2011-11-26 06:07
Do I see
a msg in your skipping me ???
loved