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TIGER"S STRIPES

Hidden by false civility
teeth veiled by lips of greed
claws kept sheathed
during the stalk for
profit

The twinkle in those laughing eyes
the same as any predator's
when sizing up its quarry

Those who think that they're his friend
due to false mask of good will
are merely meat in waiting
ear-tagged future meals for him
when profit's hunger makes him drool
take care not to be his fool

So when you see him hunting halls
of banks, dealerships and shopping malls
avoid direct eye contact
for the tiger is...............
a tiger

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Free verse
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I tried writing this twice in rhyme. Sometimes a subject demands free verse I guess.
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you could have done it, but I like what you did anyway. Is the name of the tiger "Advertising"? LOL
This all hung together very smoothly, I thought that your language was fine and I was impressed with the way that you kept the theme recognisable from beginning to end. Great job, for an incorrigable rhymer! ~ Gee

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I want more vicious predator imagery for bankers and salesman! Mwahaha makes the peasant in me want to reach for his pitch fork.

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J.A. Fisher

I Did write it twice in rhyme, but was not satisfied as the rhymes seemed forced and the rhythm was way off. Thanks for the visit.......stan

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Always good to see an unfamiliar face. I'll probably revisit this later with an expanded rhyming version if I can get it to come out right.................stan

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You're right, the corporate hunger for money is never satisfied. Thanks for the visit...........stan

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In your tank Stan or does that tank have a tiger in you? lol I have to come back to this one. Tripped up a bit for me. Come back when I can think better..

Mona

Take your time lol.........stan

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