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Summit

You perch upon your godforsacken summit
and watch as they teeter on theirs
extend solace, draw them to your boundary

They look back from theirs
near enough to speak;
self - sufficiency holds them where they are

Swim to shore and return to normality.
connect to the world
be one with reality.

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Thanks I'll take a look.

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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pictured 2 gurus sitting on seperate mountain tops yelling at each other. enjoyed reading (rose already spotted the misspells lol).............stan

Swim to shore and return to normality.
connect to the world
be one with reality.

I had the same mental picture in my head as Stan, LOL!

always, Cat

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I can see why yu would think that, but the poem about how we are basically alone, but sometimes we want to reach out.

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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The last line sounds like orders, which I, and most poets don't respond to well!

But well written, good concept, and great to see you diversifying.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

That is obviously your perception of the last line, but I had no intention of giving orders.

Glad you liked it.

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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But don't ignore the subtext. I see these things.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

Each person has a right to their own perception

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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sorry

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

. Thanks for commenting

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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